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Hai saya Nurin and I wish to have my first match here you can pick any of my girls (if you pick one of the hellhounds it will either be handicap or tag) for a match
https://www.afwrpg.com/t23085-nurin-s-girls#582172

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Post by TekRobo Mon Jul 08, 2013 12:05 am

[size=85:2hswrh2c]...I don't suppose anyone has advice for me? >->;
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Post by Bluemouse Mon Jul 08, 2013 12:12 am

Advice: Don't everyone post 200 requests in a row without offering anything thoughtful for someone else.

Also, don't post here if you're just looking for praise ò.ó


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Post by KillerV Mon Jul 08, 2013 12:20 am

Bluemouse is cute~ <img src=" title="Wink" />

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Post by TekRobo Mon Jul 08, 2013 12:36 am

Bluemouse does have a point. >.<

Ehem, Kaz: Your princess girl is pretty neat, but her laugh doesn't do it for me. "Ohohohohoho~", like, just not feeling it, ya know? Besides that, I've only really role played with one of your characters - Mio could have been a little more expressive, but was overall solid. Eri really gets playful down well, although I haven't really spied on many matches including her. The rest... less knowledge. Deepest apologies!
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Post by Tatyina Mon Jul 08, 2013 12:41 am

[quote="kaz":19lcjgkn]I suppose I could ask for some feedbacks as well~

I'd like to know what I need to improve on my writings and roleplaying in general since I'm relatively new to this stuff. I'd also like to know what people think about my characters. Who's your favorite and less favorite characters? What do you like or dislike from that particular character?

Any criticism and suggestion would be much appreciated.

Don't be afraid to trust your rp partners. MOST of them are not out to bite you. I obviously like Azami and Mayu the best. My own preferences with Mayu aside, I think you have/COULD build something nice with Azami.

[quote="CybeastGregarX":19lcjgkn][quote="kaz":19lcjgkn]I suppose I could ask for some feedbacks as well~

I'd like to know what I need to improve on my writings and roleplaying in general since I'm relatively new to this stuff. I'd also like to know what people think about my characters. Who's your favorite and less favorite characters? What do you like or dislike from that particular character?

Any criticism and suggestion would be much appreciated.
I suppose I wouldn't really mind asking for feedback on my RPing as well as my characters, well at least the ones I used so far for matches. If that would be alright. Sometimes I think I annoy people with my RPing or something.

Understand that you're not writing a short story, you're writing a collaborative narrative. Allow your rp partners to integrate their stories so they mix with what you have in mind and create a single, harmonious story that pleases both parties involved and is a pleasure to read.

Also:
Sometimes I think I annoy people with my RPing or something.
If you THINK this, then it will happen. If you're worried, ask. Don't ask more than once though.

[quote="TekRobo":19lcjgkn][size=85:19lcjgkn]...I don't suppose anyone has advice for me? >->;

Show up to the party more? You seem eager to learn, which is great and not afraid to take what's offered and give what you can when you see it. But perhaps you're a bit overeager. That could lead to sore toes on the dance floor, but 'round here it just means you might get ahead of yourself and/or your partner. You don't have to write the whole thread in one post.

There, if you want drive by critiquing, then that's what you get. Take it or leave it.

As always, communication is key!

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Post by Bluemouse Mon Jul 08, 2013 1:14 am

Advice: don't take advice from a noob like tat.

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Post by TekRobo Mon Jul 08, 2013 1:22 am

[quote="Tatyina":wxx2u4oh]

[quote="TekRobo":wxx2u4oh][size=85:wxx2u4oh]...I don't suppose anyone has advice for me? >->;

Show up to the party more? You seem eager to learn, which is great and not afraid to take what's offered and give what you can when you see it. But perhaps you're a bit overeager. That could lead to sore toes on the dance floor, but 'round here it just means you might get ahead of yourself and/or your partner. You don't have to write the whole thread in one post.


...So... show up more. I can do that.

My other problem is I sometimes write too much?

That... is much better than writing too little. ^^
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Post by Alexandra Mon Jul 08, 2013 1:24 am

That is better, usually, but remember that sometimes writing too much is just as bad as writing too little.
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Post by TekRobo Mon Jul 08, 2013 1:28 am

Right, uh, important to keep that in mind! Write not too much, and not too little, but if you write little, put just as much effort in as though you were writing big.
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Post by Bluemouse Mon Jul 08, 2013 1:49 am

@gregar:

Don't lean on a label like a crutch. Don't let a term a doctor applied to you define you. Don't stifle yourself by hiding inside it or falling back to it. Defy it. Ignore it. Have the courage to be the person you want to be and take heart in knowing that that is a bigger and stronger thing than any label anyone could slap on you.

And like, write better or something, idk.

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